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Karishma Nair

Question 10ElucidateGS1GS1

While raising women's legal marriage age could prove to be a transformational step in women empowerment, the Indian society presents certain challenges that would defeat the very purpose of it. Elucidate.

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Introduction

The PM recently set-up a panel to recommend the next ranking of women marriage from the present 18 to 24'

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The PM recently set-up a panel to recommend the next ranking of women marriage from the present 18 to 24'

Transitional step in women's empowerment

1. Would lead to gender parity in age of marriage which will tackle mentality of women having to be young

2. 1 It would raise the age of first child birth, needed for women's well-being, nutrition as well as the future child's well being.

3 It would incentivise more women to complete their education and even take up careers. (raise the female LFP2 from present 18%)

4. This would help create equal marriage, greater financial independence of women.

Indian society's challenges that make the purpose defeated

① prevalence of child marriage eg. 26 mn- child bodies in India.

② Increasing age limit will not guarantee better health & nutrition eg. 50- f. women - anaemic

③ women do not participate in economic sphere due to reasons like patriarchy , security concerns, etc. (the proposal - not tackled by the proposed)

Thus, while easily the age is concerned, also it is not a panacea & needs to be bolstered with other steps. - eg. Tax incentives for women - Security related steps. - example POSHAN Abhiyan

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Conclusion

Thus, while easily the age is concerned, also it is not a panacea & needs to be bolstered with other steps.

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  • Lists benefits and challenges
  • Provides data (26 mn child brides, 18% LFP)

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opening

The PM recently set-up a panel to recommend the next ranking of women marriage...

transition

Transitional step in women's empowerment

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26 mn child brides

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gender parity

conclusion

Thus, while easily the age is concerned, also it is not a panacea & needs to be bolstered with other steps.

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Topper

Karishma Nair

Subject & Paper

GS1GS1

Topic

Social Issues

Role of Women

Marriage age and empowerment

Writing Stats

221

Total words

8

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analytical

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